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Sample 8.5 Writing Task 1&2 (Mixed chart – Tourism)


The chart below shows the unemployment rate and the number of people leaving Ireland from 1988 to 2008.

Sample Band 8

The bar chart illustrates changes in the number of emigrants from Ireland, and the percentage of unemployed people between 1988 and 2008.

In general, the unemployment rate declined significantly over the surveyed period.

Additionally, there were substantial changes in the percentage of people leaving Ireland during this time.

In 1998, the unemployment rate stood at approximately 17%. It then dropped sharply to 13% in 1990 before increasing again to 15% in 1992. From 1992 to 2000 the figure fell substantially to around 5%. Over the latter part of the surveyed period, the figure remained stable before rising slightly to 6% in 2008.

In 1988, there were just over 60,000 people leaving Ireland. This number fell by almost half over the following four years, which was then followed by a gradual decline to around 25,000 people in 2002. Over the next 6 years the figure practically doubled, reaching 50,000 people in 2008.

(154 words)

TR: 8.0 CC: 8.0 LR8.0 GRA8.0

TASK 2: Tourism

Some people say cultural traditions are destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others say this is the only way to save such traditions.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Sample Band 8.5

Some people feel that cultural traditions are ruined when people use them to make money from tourists. Others claim that using these traditions as money-making ventures is the only way to save them. In my opinion, both views are true to a certain extent.

To begin with, many traditional customs are modified for commercialization, and eventually lose their originality and value. For example, Vietnamese traditional dances such as the lion dance, which were traditionally performed only by martial artists during special occasions, are now often poorly performed by amateurs at tourist sites across the country. Such changes not only give foreign visitors a false impression, but can also make the dance less meaningful to the local people. Also, many traditionally sacred sites are heavily damaged by the irresponsible behaviors of tourists. For instance, a well-known Youtuber named Logan Paul visited Japan and filmed himself dumping a bag of coins into a sacred well, where people often drop coins for luck, and did permanent damage to one of Japan’s most famous iconic traditions.

On the other hand, there are several reasons why making money from cultural traditions is the only way to protect them. Firstly, the revenue could be used for the preservation of such traditions. For example, many people in Bat Trang village in Vietnam make their living from selling traditional ceramic products, and thus are able to continue one of the oldest traditions in Vietnam. Secondly, by putting cultural tradtions on public display, the government could heighten people’s awareness of preserving these traditions. For instance, the Vietnamese government has built several museums around the country that solely exhibit examples of ethnic minority cultures in an attempt to protect cultural values without affecting the lives of these ethnic people, yet successfully gathering much public attention and support.

In conclusion, using cultural traditions as money-making attractions has both positive and negative impacts on the preservation of such traditions.

(319 words)

TR: 8.0 CC: 9.0 LR: 8.0 GRA: 9.0

Estimated Band Score: 8.5

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