IELTS Writing Task 2: improved 'music topic' plan

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Here's the essay plan that I asked you to think about last week:

1. Introduction: completely agree
2. Main paragraph: why music transcends cultures and age groups
3. Main paragraph: how music connects people
4. Conclusion: repeat / summarise

But KiKi suggested an alternative plan, which I think is better:

1. Introduction: completely agree
2. Main paragraph: why music transcends or connects cultures
3. Main paragraph: how music connects different age groups
4. Conclusion: repeat / summarise

KiKi has noticed that the question contains two ideas: cultures and ages. It makes sense to look at these two ideas separately and use them as the basis for our two main paragraphs. This is a great way to approach many IELTS questions.