IELTS Writing Task 1: two 'overview' examples

 The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.


Average distance in miles travelled per person per year, by mode of travel

Here are two 'overview' paragraphs for the table above. Which do you prefer? What 'technique' did I use when writing them?

Overview 1
It is clear that the car was by far the most used mode of travel in both years. Overall, English people travelled significantly more in 2000 than in 1985.

Overview 2
It is clear that the total number of miles travelled by English people using all modes of transport increased significantly between 1985 and 2000. The car was by far the most used form of transport in both years.

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